Poster first draft

poster 1st draft

Positive feedback:

-The image is in the setting of Helen How which is good as the audience will be able to relate with the village-like scenery

-There is a wide range of characters seen in the image, so the audience can immediately see there will be many storylines

-There is important information on the poster such as time, day and channel

-The picture is dark which has connotations to mystery and makes the storyline look sincere

-The colour scheme is black which also has the sincere and secretive connotations

-The sky is bright blue which would attract the audience also it connotes a fresh start

-The two characters at the front are the main focus which is intentional

Negative feedback:

-The name of the soap is in the middle which covers up the main character

-The font on the sign could be bolder and bigger

-The tag line is too small and the font needs to be more bold

-The character in the green stripey jumper seems out of place amongst the black colour scheme

-The character in the green is not looking forward which takes the impact away

-The tag line could be centralised so it is in focus more

Final cut of trailer

Trailer 2nd cut with changes made

What has been changed due to the feedback given;

-We added an up-beat modern song to make the trailer seem more professional and so young audience members will be able to relate to the trailer and therefore want to watch the soap.

-We added an extra diegetic sound effect of the slap which enhances Stephanie's anger to her husband.

-We also added extra diegetic sound effects of the clicking of the shoes at the beginning which invites the audience to want to find out who the clicking belongs to.

-We changed the transition from the shouting lads to Helen to a cross fade instead of the swipe, this made the clips fit better together better and smoother

-We also added a narration at the end of the trailer as it is conventional where the narrator reveals the slogan, the time, the channel and day it is on.

Now that I have improved this from the first cut I will get feedback and then see what else can be improved and edit a final cut so it is to the best standard.

Magazine final draft feedback

Family feedback

Positive feedback

-The tag line going in different directions adds interest

-Good use of exclamation marks

-Good bright colours

Negative feedback

-The images could have curved corners to make the layout look neater

-There could have been more information at the top of the cover

Feedback from friends

Positive feedback

-Good colouring behind the main image with a little bit of white still makes it neat but bold and stands out

-Having the images of the men around the girl on the main image makes the storyline have more possibilities and would interest the reader

-'2 weeks revealed' is in a good clear place under the logo and name of the magazine

Negative feedback

-One of the images overlaps another image a bit which looks messy

-There could have been a promotion or special gift offer to fill the space under the logo and name of magazine

Feedback from class

Positive feedback

-The colour red is very over powering so connotations are portrayed well

-The layout of pictures and coloured backgrounds is very neat and professional

-All the minor important details are present and clear on the cover

Negative feedback

-The white behind the main image makes the cover look a little messy and a bit blank

-The main shape of the images and tag lines is all square, not very varied and interesting.

Magazine Final

final final mag

Magazine feedback 2nd draft

Family feedback

Positive feedback

-Title is big and more obvious

-Better taglines because they are more interesting

-Good balanced layout of images

Negative feedback

-Could do with more images

-No promotions or competitions on the cover

-Bit blank and spacious around the main image

Feedback from friends

Positive feedback

-The title is a good clear size

-There is a bar code appropriately placed

-The tagline is relevant and interesting, it also stands out in the bright pink

-The website,issue number and date is good underneath the logo.

Negative feedback

-The area around the main image is too blank and needs a colour

-The layout needs to have more overlapping

-The tag line could be positioned differently for more impact

Feedback from class

Positive feedback

-Good layout with the banner and good choice of bright colours

-The price has been put into a bold shape with a bright colour makes it stand out

-There is now a small banner in red with the website, date and issue number which stands out and contains important information

Magazine 2nd draft

Magazine 2nd Draft

Magazine feedback 1st draft

Family feedback

Positive feedback

-Good relevant images

-Price is obvious

-Logo is good with the television screen

Negative feedbacks

-Looks blank

-Title isn't big enough

-Not eye-catching

Feedback from friends

Positive feedback

-Bright colours which are relevant to each storyline

-Nice layout with the other storylines down the side

-Obvious special edition at the top of the cover which makes it clear

Negative feedback

-The title is not clear and too small

-Nothing should overlap the logo

-There is not a date, barcode or issue number

Feedback from the class

Positive feedback

-The coloured sectioning around banner of storylines -its very conventional

-The bright pink tagline stands out and is relevant to the pregnancy storyline

-Good use of images with all different sizes

-The logo is interesting and quirky

-There is a price on it

Negative feedback

-The title is too small and not very clear

-There needs to be more overlapping

-The price needs a bold shape around it

-The '2 weeks revealed' shouldn't overlap the logo

-The overall colour and layout of the page is a bit blank

-The tagline is a bit too comical and could be seen as a sexual reference

Magazine first draft

Magazine First Draft

Feedback on Rough cut

We got feedback from members of our class, family members and friends.



Feedback from the class
Negative feedback

-There needs to be footsteps at the beginning

-There needs to be music (extra-diegetic)

-In the shot where the boys cheer at Helen, it should either be cut shorter or left longer so that either the laughing is included or got rid of.

-There needs to be titles added at the beginning

-The transition after the guys cheering is not conventional.

Positive feedback

-There is a good use of different shots

-The final shot is conventional

-Good varied range of characters

-Good lighting


Feedback from family
Negative feedback

-It cut too abruptly from the shouting boys to Helen

-There is no atmospheric music

-Should have titles at the end

-Needs a narration at the end to fit with conventions

Positive feedback

-Obvious storyline with Helen being the centre of attention

-Good final shot with everyone standing behind Helen

-It left an impression making them want to see more

Feedback from friends

Positive feedback

-Good shots making it more interesting

-Good selection of different characters with obvious costumes

-The white fade transitions when she is walking is really effective and portrays her confident character well

Negative feedback

-There is no music to help move the trailer along

-Some of the transitions are too quick and rushed making the trailer look untidy

-There is no sound effects to enhance some of the actions

Rough cut of trailer

This is the rough cut of the trailer, we will now get feedback on this cut and then improve it.

To see the rough cut on the group blog click here.

Draft posters

As I did the magazine drafts Sophie did the poster drafts. We had discussed how we wanted both the magazine and poster so we had put our ideas together then just put them on Microsoft word then uploaded them onto Scribd.

These are both the poster drafts from the group blog.

First draft of magazine 2

I put together this second layout of the magazine, I made two so that I could use different storylines differently on the cover and explore different layouts of images and captions.

To see the second layout as a first draft click here.

Filming

We had some issues when filming, the main issue was when we had planned to film but the weather stopped us, this was because of the thick fog in Gt Leighs. Therefore we had to film on a different day. The new date worked well and we finished our shots and filming during the day.
After each day we made sure we uploaded a breig log of how we had got on filming that day. I wrote the filming day 3.

To see the filming diary these are the links for each day;

Filming day 1
Filming day 2
Filming day 3
Filming day 4

Shot lists

As a group we all took pictures for the magazine and poster but Sophie made these shot lists with all the information.

To see the shotlist for the magazine and poster click here.

We also needed to improve our first draft of the shot list with the exact dates and times, costumes, equipment, location and details of the shot. This final shot list can be seen here.